~ Letting Go ~
High on a ledge above the sea, lost in thoughts
balanced on the edge of reality, not the one she sought
she couldn't go back, she had loved for naught
she couldn't go forward, her heart too distraught
the awakening came without a sound
a gradual dawning as he stopped coming around
no goodbye offered, no closure found
no anger to carry onto a battleground
in limbo on a ledge, and she couldn't understand
how forever turned to never, was that how he planned?
or did she disappoint, were they doomed beforehand?
their time played in an hourglass that ran out of sand
words of romance long cut off, only silence in their place
yet she remembered them each time she sought his face
she knew she lost something she could never replace
~ her heart ~ for it still beats for his embrace
torn with indecision, she didn't know how to be okay
to see if he was happy, she knew she'd have to stay
but she couldn't continue living in this state of disarray
so she wished him well, let go, and slipped away.
(c) Dahlia Ramone: February 7, 2016
This was written for Blogophilia
Week 51.8 topic: Lost in Seaside Thoughts (I paraphrased it)
Bonus Points:
(Hard, 2 puts): Create a desperate action for your character
(Easy, 1 pt): Mention a Charlton Heaton movie (The Awakening)
Firsties!
ReplyDeletelol! You are so fast ;)
Deletetragic...end...but the words are all perfection!
ReplyDeleteWell, the character *was* supposed to do something desperate. And I was listening to this song the other day, so it all tied in.
DeleteLove doesn't always work out the way we want it to *sigh*
ReplyDeleteIrene
It never does for me. *shrugs* C'est la vie.
DeleteVery haunting
ReplyDeleteSometimes balance means more than passion
Balance can be one of the most difficult things to establish and it requires clarity. Unfortunately, passion often clouds clarity.
DeleteBalance requires a center as well and passion can be that
DeleteShe chose the permanent solution. Sad.
ReplyDeleteYes, it's heartbreaking that anyone thinks that is a solution. Thanks for reading, Christopher.
DeleteOh girl...you always...
ReplyDeleteThe silence kills a heart like nothing other. No closure, no explanation to make it somehow make sense. The feeling like it must've not meant much to be able to just walk away that way. You and I don't just walk away. But I think the silence comes because they don't know what to say and then time just makes it worse. I guess it becomes easier to not say anything than to try to explain. ...or say I'm sorry. Tragic truth written in ink here. Love you
You nailed it, girlfriend. It's that feeling that you or the relationship really couldn't have meant anything, if someone could just walk away from it. There's a quote I found and saved on Pinterest that basically says "if my absence means nothing to you, then my presence couldn't have meant much either." And that is a tragic truth. *sighs*. Love you, too <3
DeleteI can feel that wistful sand, blowing a lullaby kiss, in your words....
ReplyDeletee
*Smiles*. Thanks, dollface ;) (((hugs)))
DeleteIf I still read live poetry, I would be begging you for this one. Meh... Reading aloud to myself...
ReplyDelete"On the ledge" part makes me nervous, so I call, categorize as metaphorical. From there, I see a search for solutions is in the works, just not today...
Great poem. You are nice to wake up to.
lol! I would have given it to you, too. And solutions eventually come, just not as quickly as we'd like.
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Oh man, this pulls my heart out and rips it to shreds!!! Much like the poor girl in the poem. You so eloquently paint with your beautiful words the sad, tragic picture of how some with broken hearts can be driven to the edge. Literally. Love you Dollface!!! <3
ReplyDeleteThe weight of a broken heart can almost drown a person, it takes such inner strength to pull through, and a lot of time. It is tragic the some don't realize there is always time to heal. Thanks, Colleen, love you tons!
DeleteDesperations last act in the play of life. Sad indeed Fantastic poem! 8 points Earthling! :)
ReplyDeleteMarvin
Sadly, it is truly the final curtain call. Thanks for the points, Marvin, I actually earned them all this week ;)
DeleteYou're a like a siren Dahlia! You're luring me toward the sea!
ReplyDeleteAh, the sea is the most soul-searching, mesmerizing rewarding place to be. But do not worry, I will keep you safe through the waters. Unless you break my heart. Then all bets are off ;)
DeleteLovely, deep and dark.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sallon, for stopping by and reading :)
DeleteI love the ocean and if the choice needed making then I would have chosen the same as she. Love isn't always a many splendored thing more often it is a many slpintered thing
ReplyDeletemake that splintered thing and not slpintered thing
DeleteI think I am better off choosing the ocean over love, maybe just not the bottom of the ocean ;)
DeleteOh wow, this is so haunting and sad. Well penned.
ReplyDeleteJay
Thanks, Jay :)
DeleteI've never heard that song before but it sure brings home your words. I love the way your ink flowed, dollface. Huggs!! ...Leta :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Leta. I've actually loved this song for years.
DeleteSo very talented. Feeling the powerful emotions through each word.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Barbara ((hugs))
DeleteWe had the same theme this week, but yours is way better than mine
ReplyDeleteStormy
Awww, I'll have to stop by to read yours. Thanks for coming by, Stormy.
DeleteThat was pretty awesome!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Brian. Always love when you stop by ;)
DeleteVery nicely written! :)
ReplyDeleteDJ
So sad and so moving. Your poetry makes me think of music by The Moody Blues.
ReplyDeleteAs in "Nights in White Satin"
That's my favorite Moody Blues song :)
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